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Coffee with Cagney

by David Paul
(Methuen, MA)

It's 1949, and I'm ten. This is November and the days are filled with raw air and the feeling of Christmas coming. A bell jingles over the door of Hershey’s Coffee Shop as my father and I barge in out of the cold.

Hershey's is very small. There are three little tables on one wall, and there is a counter with six stools across from them.

It's early in the morning and the place is very crowded. It's all men here, most of them piled around tables that can't even be seen. Some are hunched over the tiny counter, plopped on stools that are too little for big people.

I like being here. It's bright and warm and I can sniff in the delicious smells of doughnuts and hot coffee. My father grabs my hand and leads me to the only empty stools. He tells me to sit on the one by the wall and he scoots on the one next to me.

Hershey comes over. He is red-faced and bald. He rubs his hands on his apron and looks at us, waiting for my father to tell him something.

My father is wearing a mackinaw jacket and a gray hat with the brim pulled down, like James Cagney wears when he's being a gangster, and he smells kind of soapy scrubbed. I can smell him more than the other smells of coffee and doughnuts and I'm happy to be in this place with him.

"Coffee," my father says, "and give us a couple of them crullers."

Hershey grins at me and he says "So this is your boy, Red?"

"Yep, this is my boy, David. And he can have a cup of coffee too, to go with his cruller. He's getting big enough for coffee. Put a lot of milk in it, so it's not too hot."

I drink the coffee and eat the cruller, and everything is bright and warm. It is swell to be with my father and to be around all these noisy men. Someday I'll be all grown up, just like my father and all these men.

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Mar 23, 2012
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No Literature Fraud Here NEW
by: David Paul

It's possible that Bonnyphonic, having posted anonymously, afterwards decided to use a screen name. Hardly significant at this late date.


Mar 23, 2012
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Is this even accurate? NEW
by: Anonymous

I wonder why the comments by "Bunnyphonic" and then "Anonymous" right underneath it, said the exact same thing word for word. It must be because anyone, even the writer, can post as many phony compliments as they want. They should fix this.

Cool story but seeing that just make the winner seem false.

Jan 22, 2012
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First time at this site NEW
by: Sungarnet

All my life I have wanted to learn to write, I think I have alot to say :)This was so well put together. It put me right there and made me think of something from my childhood to write about. It conveyed so much in such a short time.

Oct 31, 2011
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Top story.
by: Pippab

I enjoyed your heart warming story very much.

Oct 27, 2011
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vivid and impressive.
by: philemon

used the sense organs perfectly with literature.

Aug 08, 2011
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Loved it
by: Bunnyphonic

Oh, this truly warmed my heart and made my day! Thank you for such a sweet story. Endearing and vivid in every way that good fiction should be.

Aug 08, 2011
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Loved it
by: Anonymous

Oh, this truly warmed my heart and made my day! Thank you for such a sweet story. Endearing and vivid in every way that good fiction should be.

May 27, 2011
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GOOD WORK
by: AWURIKI YEBOAH.

very impressive.

May 05, 2011
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Great stuff
by: Every(wo)man

It was the kind of story that i wish could have continued. I smelled, tasted and felt on my skin all that your words described. I believe you have a memoir in the making. Love the characters.

Jan 21, 2011
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Beautiful
by: Meher Ansari

It's a beautiful story of a ten years old boy who is grown up enough to drink coffee -- with more milk. No wonder, he wishes to grow up and for ever remembers the noisy men and the smell of coffee! So very true to life.

Jan 02, 2011
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Cool
by: Leanne

Definitely a talented writer. With more nurturing you could go along way!

Dec 04, 2010
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Wonderful
by: Lisa Clayton Williams

I am new to the site and am just now reading this....love your writing style. I felt like I was there.

Nov 30, 2010
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WOW
by: Chel

this is brilliant. You are very talented. I really felt as if I was sat next to the ten year old you in that coffee shop. I will reread this whenever I need my spirits lifted in a hurry.

I really hope to see more of your work someday

Oct 18, 2010
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smelling the coffee.
by: Ellen-Jo

Even though I've never physically went there, this mornig I was smelling your smells, thank you for that

Sep 30, 2010
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Lovely Memory
by: Glynis Smy

A lovely descriptive memoir piece. Thanks for sharing.

Sep 29, 2010
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Wonderful, vivid writing
by: Donna

Beautifully written.

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