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Love

by David M. Harris
(Kingston Springs, TN)

One of the things I hate about this town is the VFW hall. It's where there is to go, and everyone goes there. The same damn people all the time, with the same damn histories.

Even Doreen, whom I love right now, is the same. We go to a dance at the VFW and she's been married to or in love with or in bed with half the guys there. So even though I love her, right now, I keep an eye on her.

She dances with other guys--I'm not some paleolithic male chauvinist--but I keep an eye on her. And sometimes, like this time, when she's letting herself be kissed and groped by one of the local petty hoodlums, she forgets herself, and I have to take her out and explain again, forcefully, about us, and how it is between us, and how I love her. Right now.

It's just too bad that she bruises so easily.

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Love

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May 08, 2012
 Awesome! NEW
by: Anonymous

I think it is a really great story considering it is less than 300 words. Wish I could read some more of it!
May 01, 2012
 Unique NEW
by: Anonymous

This is very unique and its really good for only 300 words! Wish there was more to it!!:)
Mar 15, 2012
 A Vivid Picture NEW
by: Kate W

It's not all romance and roses is it? A brilliant piece that paints a very vivid picture. Well done. I'm looking forward to the next competition in this challenging category.
Mar 08, 2012
 unbelievable NEW
by: Anonymous

I have to write a short story under 300 and have been scrambling trying to figure out how to fit intense emotion into such little space. This is amazing. Stunning.
Feb 21, 2012
 well done NEW
by: Catlover

i think your story was very good. i mean, for a story under 300 words. i am a young writer and am exploring new ways to write, but i dont think i could write a story like that under 300 words. so, cudos.
Jan 07, 2012
 VFW NEW
by: Anonymous

The Veterans of Foreign Wars is a well-known organization in the U.S., whose meeting halls are often open to the public for social events.
Jan 07, 2012
 Abbreviations NEW
by: Tony

VFW...what is it? You should at least once in your story explain what it is.
Jan 01, 2012
 violent love NEW
by: Essam M. Al Jassim

( bruises so easily ) that sums it all up. Great ending line. That explained how she had been in bed with many guys.
Nov 23, 2011
 Great Read NEW
by: BJMinWA

You were able to paint such a vivid picture of two characters in such a short span of words. Great job!
Sep 30, 2011
 Haha :)
by: Lauren @ Pure Text

This made me laugh because I can relate to the characters (the narrator and Doreen). I really enjoyed the style it was written in too.
Sep 08, 2011
 Brilliant!
by: KLC

Amazing! This work shows such a talent for bringing out very deep feeling in very few words. Brilliantly written from the start, and the final line left me, in the least, open-mouthed. It also stayed with me. Less than 200 words and I was disturbed. I'm envious...
Well done!
Aug 30, 2011
 not bad dude
by: Anonymous

personally i cannot write short stories i have the urge to write more and expand the story, but you were able to write such a short story so successfully.And i must say the last sentence changes the whole perspective of the story. Seriously amazing man!And a very interesting perspective on love too. have u fallen in love?
Aug 24, 2011
 Bravo!
by: Anonymous

You clearly defined the two meaning of love -- forgiving and possessive.
Jun 13, 2011
 Great!
by: Danika

This story is amazing! It's no wonder you won! I have to tell you, the very first sentence reeled me in all the way to the last. I literally said, "awwww," when I read the last sentence. Very good work!
May 06, 2011
 WOW
by: Ghazala

I wondered how any story could be told in so few words...but you have managed to do it brilliantly! Congratulations
May 05, 2011
 SMART
by: sophia

Smart and real - can touch nerves
A Little Goes A Long Way!
well crafted
And yes a good thouth provoking propt
May 05, 2011
 I love it.
by: Megan Brock

This story is lovely, and the ending was well put together. It tells the story that not everyone is perfect, and if you cannot fix your own problems you'll have a hell of a time fixing someone elses.
Apr 12, 2011
 Inspiring
by: Anonymous

Your Short story was an inspiration to show that it is possible to write something that short but still have the effects and longer worder story has.

Even though you had no explaination of the character or the woman. I could still feel the emotions he had inside, so thank you xxoo
Feb 21, 2011
 Nice
by: Amlandeep Bhattacharya

The short story ' Love ' is really well written. Kudos to the writer for presonting us with such a good story.
Feb 05, 2011
 ow
by: Old campaigner

what a bruiser! Such a short story, raising so many questions!

Wish i could write like you...
Feb 04, 2011
 well..
by: Anonymous

so much anger. i wonder why this person would stay with the woman even though he sees her with other men..could it really be love?
Aug 26, 2010
 Great
by: Anonymous

The character gets your sympathy because he is in love with a "loose" woman. That is, until the last sentence then that one sentence gives a different perpective of the character.
Jul 12, 2010
 LOVE
by: Anonymous

the story love is very much impressive...cbviously shows the writers expression.......and condensed into a short story...
Jun 26, 2010
 Commendable
by: Anonymous

I commend you for fitting such a big picture into such a small passage. It paints a clear picture of the feelings the character is experiencing.
Jun 08, 2010
 Clever
by: Anonymous

This story, "Love," is like a short O'Henry. I like the way the single word, "forcefully," confirms the suspicion that the reader has been developing, and the last line clinches the matter. But in a way it's almost too over-the-top for a topic that needs to be treated seriously. But maybe not. To make the reader think using only 300 words is quite a feat.

Well-done.
Jun 02, 2010
 Chilling
by: Anonymous

Great use of voice in this story. The narrator's innocuous tone makes the end even more chilling. Wonderful!

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