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Jan 16, 2020
4 stars NEW
by: The Official Critic of the World

Again, a very good sense of place, but I have one problem with it, Mrs. Tiffany.
Although all of your adjectives and adverbs are very good, and they describe well, they also make it harder for the story to follow, and I find that a lot of it is description, which I'm not opposed to. Maybe work more on telling about what you did, and a little less description. Personally I love descriptions, but so many describing words are somewhat overwhelming.
Very enjoyable overall, and I wish that I could visit the place.

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